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Post by Spiralbound on Dec 21, 2008 3:10:00 GMT -5
Hi, I just downloaded the three TvH pdfs. Congratulations on making a fun game with a genuinely novel twist on a familiar theme. I can't wait to print out my own little armies of Tortoises and Hares, and convince some friends to join me in the eternal struggle! ;D As I read the rules though I was struck by how with just a little bit of editing, it could be a lot better sounding and in a couple of places actually clearer to understand. Things like mixing up "there" and "they're", extra words or sometimes missing words in sentences, and so on. They weren't terrible errors, but they were fairly consistent throughout the whole pdf, to the point that I found them distracting as I read. Considering the price I paid for this, I can't really complain. However, I can offer to fix up the grammar, spelling and sentence structure if you're interested. What do you say, willing to see a little bit of editorial polishing performed on this admirable little game? It'll cost you just as much as the game cost me! ;D I can run through the text, clean it up and email it to you. Given how short the rules are, it would only take me a couple of hours to do. All you'd need to do is paste it into the original document and re-upload the revised pdf. Interested? If so, give me a buzz through my gmail.com account with the username "spiralbound".
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Post by shaungamer on Dec 22, 2008 19:13:41 GMT -5
TvH is in the middle of a small revision (which is taking a bit longer because of the holiday break) however the revision will not address typo's or gramatical errors. When I get it finished (yes it is me causing the delays) I would love to take you up on the offer.
~Shaun
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Post by spiralbound on Dec 22, 2008 23:30:56 GMT -5
TvH is in the middle of a small revision (which is taking a bit longer because of the holiday break) however the revision will not address typo's or gramatical errors. When I get it finished (yes it is me causing the delays) I would love to take you up on the offer. ~Shaun Hi Shaun, I appreciate the graciously positive response. I look forward to breaking out the editorial polish and rubbing some of the grammatical burrs off the revised text! ;D
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Post by driftinhank29 on Aug 13, 2013 10:28:58 GMT -5
One typo I noticed in tvh was with the tortoise archers. It says under the archers attributes tight cohesion, i believe this should say loose cohesion since tight cohesion is not an attribute and is in fact the default for troopers.
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